You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town.Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods

Essay topics:

You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town.

Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

Dear Sir or Madam,

Greetings for the day!

My name is Amanpreet Kaur residence of Patiala, Punjab. Through this letter, I want some information regarding some electrical things whether you have this or not.

Kindly allow me to elaborate on this matter. Firstly, I need Phillip decoration lamps, electrical bulbs in multicolour, a DVD player with high quality of sound buffers, and also a radio which has one year of warranty. Secondly, let me know do you have all these things or not. If you don't have all these goods, then could you please order them for me?

Moreover, could you provide the amount of all these equipment including goods service tax? Still, I have a question in my mind that how long time you can hold these things for me. Actually, currently, I am out of town, so will be there after fifteen days. Therefore, If possible can you hold these items for me up to 15 days? By doing so, not I get my goods, but also I refer your shop to my other friends.

Looking forward to your prompt response.

Yours faithfully,
Amanpreet Kaur

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir or Madam, Greetings for the day! My name is Ama...
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Line 7, column 285, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ou have all these things or not. If you dont have all these goods, then could you pl...
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Line 9, column 47, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this equipment' or 'these equipments'?
Suggestion: this equipment; these equipments
...er, could you provide the amount of all these equipment including goods service tax? Still, I h...
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Line 9, column 231, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: thereafter
...currently, I am out of town, so will be there after fifteen days. Therefore, If possible ca...
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Line 14, column 15, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...se. Yours faithfully, Amanpreet Kaur
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 880.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 187.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70588235294 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45838130716 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.695187165775 0.622605031667 112% => OK
syllable_count: 255.6 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.7532298103 44.8134815571 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.6923076923 76.5299724578 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3846153846 16.8248392259 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 4.34317383033 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204906309433 0.216113520407 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662416343879 0.0766984524023 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616118967438 0.0603063233224 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0875086817924 0.12726935374 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751283309138 0.0580467560999 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 8.37731958763 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 8.71597938144 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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