You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town.Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods

Essay topics:

You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town.

Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

Write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to express my interest in purchasing some of the electronic items from your shop for my place.

Recently I have purchased a two-bedroom flat and would like to purchase some electronic items for my place which are necessary. I would like to have a mixer, a grinder, toaster, water heater, microwave, Samsung refrigerator, Samsung television and dishwasher

I would like to know that if all the things are available in your shop. If not could you please order them for me on urgent basis? Moreover, could you please send me the price quotation of all the things along with the warranty information and the maximum discount you can offer on the purchase.

Furthermore, I will move t my flat on 29th of September, so I would be highly obliged if you can inform me the length of time you can hold these articles for me.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,

Prabhpreet Kaur

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...er to express my interest in purchasing some of the electronic items from your shop for my ...
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Line 5, column 259, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rator, Samsung television and dishwasher I would like to know that if all the thi...
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Line 15, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n. Yours faithfully, Prabhpreet Kaur
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, look, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 787.0 937.175257732 84% => OK
No of words: 165.0 206.0 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7696969697 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69983504581 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 127.690721649 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618181818182 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 237.6 290.88556701 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.5457887042 44.8134815571 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.375 76.5299724578 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 16.8248392259 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 4.34317383033 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195898619848 0.216113520407 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782378705281 0.0766984524023 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397892734321 0.0603063233224 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0991600968647 0.12726935374 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419666604197 0.0580467560999 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 8.37731958763 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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