You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a town which is far from your home.Write a letter to the manager of the shop. In your letter:say which electrical goods you wantask questions about the cost of the goods and how to payexplain how yo

Essay topics:

You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a town which is far from your home.
Write a letter to the manager of the shop. In your letter:
say which electrical goods you want
ask questions about the cost of the goods and how to pay
explain how you will collect the goods.
Write at least 150 words.
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear...

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to enquire about some electrical equipment that I would like to buy from your shop. I want a freezer, LED panel and water purifier for my house. Moreover, I want to buy all the items of Samsung brand if it is possible.

Well, it is convenient for me to arrange money, if you send me the invoice of each product in advance. In addition, could you please mail the details of such items likewise color, model and size. Apart from this, I would like to pay the total charges by credit card because it takes time to collect cash.

if you have your own transport means then mention me earlier either I can arrange on my pace. However, I visit with my wife on saturday morning to collect goods. For, further information you can contact me on 988859925 or amitc@gmail.co.

Looking forward for your response as soon as possible.

Yours faithfully,
Amit

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...cause it takes time to collect cash. if you have your own transport means then ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, likewise, look, moreover, so, then, well, apart from, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 740.0 937.175257732 79% => OK
No of words: 159.0 206.0 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65408805031 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50251248299 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 127.690721649 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.691823899371 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 221.4 290.88556701 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.6576086544 44.8134815571 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.2727272727 76.5299724578 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4545454545 16.8248392259 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09090909091 4.34317383033 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192008946632 0.216113520407 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660998400898 0.0766984524023 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0805506361193 0.0603063233224 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102240258711 0.12726935374 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628342941583 0.0580467560999 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 8.37731958763 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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