You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a town which is far from your home.Write a letter to the manager of the shop. In your letter:•say which electrical goods you want•ask questions about the cost of the goods and how to pay•expla

Essay topics:

You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a town which is far from your home.
Write a letter to the manager of the shop. In your letter:
• say which electrical goods you want
• ask questions about the cost of the goods and how to pay
• explain how you will collect the goods.

Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to inquire about the water heater you sell in your store. As I am far away from your store, I want to know some details of the heater before in hand.

The water heater I am looking for is the one with a rating of 5 litre capacity, 1000 watts power and automatic temperature switch incorporated in it. If there are any other option please let me know. I am looking for a mid-size family of 5 members.

Please let me know the price range for the models falling under the above-mentioned rating. Also, it would be great if you could inform the available methods of payment.
I will collect the goods during the evening with a small trailer attached to my car capable of carrying 1 ton of goods. I would be grateful if you could arrange a person who could help me in supporting to load the heater to my trailer.

I am looking forward for your response as soon as possible.
Yours sincerely,
Vijay

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 151, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... temperature switch incorporated in it. If there are any other option please let m...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ng to load the heater to my trailer. I am looking forward for your response as...
^
Line 11, column 6, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on as possible. Yours sincerely, Vijay
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 767.0 937.175257732 82% => OK
No of words: 172.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45930232558 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51288593601 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.622093023256 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 238.5 290.88556701 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.916429153 44.8134815571 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.7272727273 76.5299724578 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6363636364 16.8248392259 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.63636363636 4.34317383033 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130010521751 0.216113520407 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511030797045 0.0766984524023 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450301921471 0.0603063233224 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.066434006922 0.12726935374 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0526543423756 0.0580467560999 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 8.37731958763 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.29 8.71597938144 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 41.2886597938 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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