You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a town which is far from your home.Write a letter to the manager of the shop. In your letter:say which electrical goods you wantask questions about the cost of the goods and how to payexplain how yo

Essay topics:

You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a town which is far from your home.

Write a letter to the manager of the shop. In your letter:

say which electrical goods you want
ask questions about the cost of the goods and how to pay
explain how you will collect the goods.
Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear...

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to enquire if you have some electrical items that I need to purchase. I have tried to find these in the shops in my town but the options here are very limited and I have not been able to find what I need.

The first item I need is an external Blu-ray drive, preferably Sony, and a Smartphone with a 12 megapixel camera. I am also looking for a printer which combines copying and scanning functions. If these items are available, could you please keep them for me at the shop as I would like to collect them in person when I visit the town next week. I would also like to know if it is possible to pay online with PayPal or by telephone with a credit card, or if I can pay when I pick up the goods.

I would really appreciate it if you could reply to my enquiry as soon as possible.

Yours faithfully,

George Peterson

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, really, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 698.0 937.175257732 74% => OK
No of words: 165.0 206.0 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.2303030303 4.54256449028 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3970137528 2.54303337028 94% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 127.690721649 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618181818182 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 222.3 290.88556701 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.6211602083 44.8134815571 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.25 76.5299724578 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 16.8248392259 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 4.34317383033 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155789479052 0.216113520407 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620364078171 0.0766984524023 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380411622777 0.0603063233224 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0890626930953 0.12726935374 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0136331144215 0.0580467560999 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 8.37731958763 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 70.7449484536 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.25 8.71597938144 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 41.2886597938 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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