Your child is going on three days school trip to another country The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go write letter to head teacher Why you would like to go on the trip suggest what you could do to help durin

Essay topics:

Your child is going on three days school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.
write letter to head teacher :-
Why you would like to go on the trip
suggest what you could do to help during the trip
Ask other questions about the trip.

Dear Ms.Catherian

My name is Samvedna Puri and I am mother of Mohan Puri who is studying in 7th grade at your institution. I am inscribing this piece of epistle to notify you my willingness to join this three days trip to United States. As i am a professional and snatch very less quality time to spend with my kith and kins, hence this itinerary would be the impeccable opportunity to create the unforgettable memories with my child.

Since, It has been 5 years that i am practicing as child specialist in local government hospital and have valuable experience in such field. Undoubtedly, the health of youngsters is the imperative concern which can not be overlooked at any cost .Therefore, i can look after the children in case of any severe emergency through arranging the first aid facilities and this is how i can contribute.

It would be grateful if you provide me the necessary information regarding the timings of arrival and departure along with the dates of whole journey. So, i could take off accordingly from work. Furthermore, acquaint me with the weather conditions which may prevail over there during that time and this would assist in packing the essential commodities for untoward conditions.
Hope to hear from you very soon.

Your sincerely,
Samvedna Puri.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, regarding, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1077.0 937.175257732 115% => OK
No of words: 216.0 206.0 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98611111111 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93174746109 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 127.690721649 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.662037037037 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 334.8 290.88556701 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.8858942245 44.8134815571 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.7 76.5299724578 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 16.8248392259 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 4.34317383033 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12218763455 0.216113520407 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492029969926 0.0766984524023 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0373320092185 0.0603063233224 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0716277951635 0.12726935374 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369319096925 0.0580467560999 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 8.37731958763 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 70.7449484536 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 7.45979381443 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 8.71597938144 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 41.2886597938 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.