Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.

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Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.

Dear Madam,
I am Ritu Patel, a physiotherapist by profession. I have recently got a transfer to Brampton and will be moving there by the end of this month. I am writing this letter to ask for a place in your school for my son Vivek Desai, who is in grade 2.
My son is very intelligent and excels in academics as well as sports. He has scored 90% in grade 1 and is outstanding at playing cricket and volleyball. He is also interested in music and has recently learned playing piano.
I am enclosing his report card with this letter. I will be happy to provide more information about Vivek if you need. Please let me know if he can get admission at your school or not.
Hoping for your early response.
Yours sincerely,
Ritu

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 211, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to play'.
Suggestion: to play
...ested in music and has recently learned playing piano. I am enclosing his report card...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 26.3917525773 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 600.0 937.175257732 64% => OK
No of words: 136.0 206.0 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41176470588 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.41495297035 3.78020617076 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67097043132 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 127.690721649 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.676470588235 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 182.7 290.88556701 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.7958963974 44.8134815571 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 54.5454545455 76.5299724578 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.3636363636 16.8248392259 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.72727272727 4.34317383033 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209389939004 0.216113520407 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713793391207 0.0766984524023 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595902499429 0.0603063233224 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110280084242 0.12726935374 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495793552662 0.0580467560999 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.5 8.37731958763 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 84.68 70.7449484536 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.4 7.45979381443 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.41 8.71597938144 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 41.2886597938 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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