Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people's health.Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people's health.
Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that shops should stop selling junk food and liquor as scientific investigations has revealed that they are hazardous for human health. this essay totally agrees with that statement as eating fast food and consuming liquor causes illness and can cause early death.

Consumption of unhealthy food and drinks can lead to many health conditions like obesity, diabetes, liver cancer etc as they are high in trans fatty acids and cholesterol. Wines and beer contain alcohol in them which can lead to liver and kidney damage. In a study done by Cambridge University on the people of Brampton found that about 80% of population suffered from health related issues because of daily consumption of lunch from restaurants.

Another reason for banning such food and drinks is that it can cause untimely death and because of this the family members have to survive with grief. having these types of foods and drinks can cause severe damage to human body and this lead to decrease in the life expectancy. A major change happens in the life of close family members because of death and this leads to depression in their life. For example, according to world census, about 60% of men and women die at an young age as they had bad nutritional choices.

To conclude, sale of hazardous food and drinks should be banned from restaurants and cafes as they lead to increase in morbidity and mortality. It is recommended that government should intervene in this matter and take legal actions against such shops.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1257.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92941176471 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48009375869 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596078431373 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 381.6 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.8329471781 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 114.272727273 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1818181818 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.72727272727 7.06120827912 24% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188190004174 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672473568322 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585621824555 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11178380021 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374158574065 0.056905535591 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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