Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people's health.
Do you agree or disagree?
some people claim that the shops and restaurants should prohibit food which are proven scientifically unhealthy for people. For me, while this suggestion seems good to people, it is not a good way to prevent people from having them. I will briefly explain my ideas in the following paragraphs.
it is totally understandable why some individuals are for the idea to ban shops to sell unhealthy food or drinks to the public. As we all know, in order to attract more people and increase the sale of products, companies would like to put some so-called magical ingredients to the food or drinks. To use the gummy bear as an example, since within the bag, it includes different flavors which are similar with the fruit, it is difficult to get enough fruit taste and smells from small amount of food. In this case, some companies would add small amount of chemical which would be bad for human health to the gummy bear.this chemical not only increase the fruit flavor trmendously, but also save the company a lot of money to avoid buying the fruit. if the government are carrying out some regulations to restrict such actions, consumers would have much healthier life instead.
However, though preventing stores from selling unhealthy food or drinks would be good for people, I doubt this is the most appropriate action for the government to take. Firstly, people would still get those delicious but unhealthy food in others if the government has banned them. Besides, it would be bad for the company's economy and have affect on its employees. Last but not least, there should be better ways for people's health instead of those strict regulations. For example, government can have more focus on lecturing the public the healthy lifestyle, like having more exercise instead of being sedetary for hours. also, there can be some department to help with the food and drink company to regulate how their products have been manfactured. we should care more about the process instead of the results.
All in all, it is important to regulate stores to sell unhealthy products, but it is more vital to educate the public about the health and focus on the process of those productions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, briefly, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, still, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89459459459 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55607813404 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518918918919 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9859673784 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.1875 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.125 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4375 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311246828319 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11088179597 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829970022283 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180683113161 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0873678559934 0.056905535591 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.