Some people believe famous people's support towards international aid organizations draws the attention to problems. While others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In the current days, there are more and more social and environmental problems happening because of the development of high technology and civilization. there is a trend that famous people begin to participate in the society to ask for public's attention. some claim this is a good move, but others do not agree with this idea. For me, personally I do believe that the problem would draw more attention thanks to the famous figures' devotion.
it is quite understandable why famous people's support would draw more attention to problems. Firstly, the famous figures will have more influence on the public. Every move they take will attract a number of attention not only from the public but also from social media. if famous people support one organization or aid, without doubt, social media has invisibly publicized this action and organization as well. The public would pay attention to this and be more willing to know and aid this organization. Secondly, the famous people would have more money than ordinary people, perhaps, their financial support would mean the help from one thousand people. Last but not least, the famous people have an influence on their fans, helping the organization would mean supporting their idols in some way. In this case, the organization would have more helping hands.
However, it is also possible that the famous figure would not help solve the problem, and even bring negative influence on this organization. because if the famous figure is not having a good reputation, this would enable the public to criticize the decision of this organization, and hence reduce the attention from the public.
In spite of all these discussions, I still hold the idea that famous figures would help draw more attention to the organization or aid. because the popularity of the social media would help more people realize the significance of the organization and at the same time, the famous people have their influence on their fans, the organization would have more hands to help them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 8.3376753507 312% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1686.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06306306306 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67159272307 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459459459459 0.561755894193 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.02356154 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.375 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8125 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8125 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19876311448 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0904890565711 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629248630673 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13514955313 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489980570889 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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