Some people believe famous people's support towards international aid organizations draws the attention to problems. While others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The eminent persons like to join the activities that raised by international aid bodies and enjoy promoting them to the public. While sceptics questioned their motivations and negative impacts, most people are appreciated with celebrities' charity. This essay will illustrate the pros and cons of well-known persons’ charity behaviour and explain why I believe it could exert positive impacts on society.
It is true that the inducement underlying celebrities for supporting global aid organisations are various and uncertainty. Some famous persons might take charity opportunities to bright their fame in order to pursue more benefits. The newspapers usually allocate a portion of articles for exposing pop star's charity to abstract their fans for buying its news. This phenomenon can get problems less important. Nonetheless, the exposure of eminent persons' charity could bring more attention from the public on the urgent global problems. As the juveniles often regard famous persons as their role models and mimic their behaviours, celebrities' support towards international aid departments could influence their followers to understand the situation further.
From my point of view, getting more people concerned would pave the road for more individuals to be dedicated to solving global issues. The responsibilities of taking care of the environment should not be counted on government only. Many organisations, however, are not expertized in advertising or promoting of their concerns and relevant charity schemes. Thus, celebrities become the channel to draw the public’s attention. On the flip side, the relevant news would be censored and advised to exerting the subtle influence over global issues rather than concentrate on famous persons.
To conclude, celebrities’ participation is definitely an add-on to the international aid organisation when dealing with problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, nonetheless, so, thus, well, while, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1620.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.8064516129 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15855016607 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.63082437276 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9634677466 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.0 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58333333333 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182655555216 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629082471464 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440037995412 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104378838182 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.02971131174 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.71 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.1 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.