Your local council is considering closing a sport and leisure center that it runs, in order to save money,
Write a letter to the local council, in your letter,
Give details of how you and your friends or family use the center.
Explain the why the center is important for the local community.
Describe the possible effects on local people if the center closed.
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to explain about the necessity of a sport and leisure center for our society. This is in reference to the paper article dated 24th November wherein the commissioner has stated that they are hoping to will hope to close down the existing sport center which is located at city area.
Actually, I would like insist that this social facility is been used by the entire neighborhood including myself for sport activities such as Indoor cricket, Tennis and social activities such as movie screening.
This community is a closely net community which comprises about fifty families mostly with young kids, who uses this facility on a daily basis.
Furthermore I also want to empersise that this facility has been a place which has provided better community interactions and provided valuable health benefits for the community.
Given the above reasoning I hope that the commissioner will rethink about the closure decision and provide me a favorable reply, which will be beneficial for the whole community.
Thanks
Yours sincerely
mohan
Comments
Essay evaluation report
they are hoping to will hope to close down the existing sport center
they are hoping to close down the existing sport center
I would like insist that this social facility is been used by the entire neighborhood
I would like to insist that this social facility has been used by the entire neighborhood
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Words: 173 250 //more content wanted
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 173 250
No. of Characters: 869 1200
No. of Different Words: 112 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.627 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.023 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.58 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 61 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 46 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.794 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.286 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.42 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.919 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 295, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t center which is located at city area. Actually, I would like insist that this ...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...uses this facility on a daily basis. Furthermore I also want to empersise that this faci...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, furthermore, if, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.03092783505 297% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 26.3917525773 64% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 907.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 172.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27325581395 4.54256449028 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65719300937 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 127.690721649 87% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.645348837209 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 287.1 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.360824742268 277% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 24.0 16.3608247423 147% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9077452376 44.8134815571 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.571428571 76.5299724578 169% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 16.8248392259 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 4.34317383033 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109716234877 0.216113520407 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592816971665 0.0766984524023 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518460791687 0.0603063233224 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0442512703746 0.12726935374 35% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541951668304 0.0580467560999 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 8.37731958763 187% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 70.7449484536 55% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 7.45979381443 185% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 8.71597938144 156% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 7.59969072165 121% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 8.54432989691 136% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 8.15463917526 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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