Your photograph has won the first prize in the photography competition.This will be displayed in an exhibition. Write a letter inviting your friend at the exhibition and include:1) What was the photograph about?2) Where did you take it?3) What prize have

Essay topics:

Your photograph has won the first prize in the photography competition.
This will be displayed in an exhibition. Write a letter inviting your friend at the exhibition and include:
1) What was the photograph about?
2) Where did you take it?
3) What prize have you won?

Dear Sally,

I am glad to inform you that one of the photographs I took during my recent visit to Norway has been selected to be a part of this month's city exhibition to be held next Saturday at the Sentrum Hall.

The picture is about a group on people, all in their late forties who were enroute the toughest hike of the country. I was also doing the same hike during that time, when I met them. Though it's nearly impossible for the people of this age to climb that mountain, but they were thoroughly enthusiastic and deterministic about their hike, and it is getting reflected clearly in the picture too.

This picture has won in the category of "Passion and Pain" in this month's selection and I shall be awarded with the first price in the category which is worth over USD 1000.

I am sure you will find time to attend the event along with your family. Also, let me know about your arrival schedule so that I can arrange a suitable seating arrangement for all of you.

Your truly,
Deepak

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sally, I am glad to inform you that one of the ...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...way has been selected to become part of this months city exhibition to be held next ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ted very clearly in the picture too. this picture has won in the category of &apo...
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Line 7, column 78, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'months'' or 'month's'?
Suggestion: months'; month's
...of 'Passion and Pain' in this months selection and I shall be awarded with t...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...me to attend the event coming Saturday. also, let confirm me your arrival schedule s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, so, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 826.0 937.175257732 88% => OK
No of words: 178.0 206.0 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6404494382 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4864231769 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.668539325843 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.1582785292 44.8134815571 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.25 76.5299724578 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 16.8248392259 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 4.34317383033 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129268238031 0.216113520407 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536291670617 0.0766984524023 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0313185813944 0.0603063233224 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0654755481188 0.12726935374 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281230009715 0.0580467560999 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 8.37731958763 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 8.71597938144 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.