You live in a room in college which you share with another student.However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find itvery difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letterdescribe the situatio

Essay topics:

You live in a room in college which you share with another student.
However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it
very difficult to work.
Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter
describe the situation
explain your problems and why it is difficult to work
say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Mr Singh,

I am writing to request you to allow me leaves for one month in order to pursue studies for a qualification course in management.

I have been working in the same job profile for the last three years which has enriched me almost with all the aspects of the present role, and it is an appropriate time for me to diversify into more challenging roles. Therefore, I have decided to do a part time qualification course in Business management.

The course is designed to teach candidates work management and interpersonal skills, which are essential for handling teams as I will progress ahead. Furthermore, it will help me manage my work better and improve coordination with my fellow colleagues. Without any doubt, I will become an impeccable human resource which the organization can utilize for future positions, in addition to increased productivity and shorten turnaround time in the current role.

I look forward to your permission and grant of leaves to pursue this qualification.

Yours sincerely,

Deepak Gupta

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
Dear Mr Singh, I am writing to request you to allow me ...
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... qualification course in management. I have been working in the same job prof...
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Suggestion: part-time
...oles. Therefore, I have decided to do a part time qualification course in Business manage...
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...ation course in Business management. The course is designed to teach candidat...
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Suggestion: colleagues
...better and improve coordination with my fellow colleagues. Without any doubt, I will become an im...
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...turnaround time in the current role. I look forward to your permission and gr...
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...leaves to pursue this qualification. Yours sincerely, Deepak Gupta
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, look, so, therefore, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 900.0 937.175257732 96% => OK
No of words: 170.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29411764706 4.54256449028 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0580542019 2.54303337028 120% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.664705882353 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 276.3 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.7493462307 44.8134815571 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.5 76.5299724578 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 16.8248392259 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 4.34317383033 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103674290755 0.216113520407 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432711955863 0.0766984524023 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0217812427181 0.0603063233224 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0584555812388 0.12726935374 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00475911984644 0.0580467560999 8% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 8.37731958763 168% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 70.7449484536 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 7.45979381443 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 8.71597938144 154% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 7.59969072165 121% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 8.15463917526 184% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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