Your sister kate. Her addiction to cigarette smoking.
The story started when Kate began smoking cigarettes during her high school years. Seemingly, teenagers are easily manipulated into recreational activities when they see others doing the same. They are always looking to explore whatever the world has to offer and smoking is one way to start, according to a study conducted by the NY Science Magazine.
Just before university, she had finally decided to abstain from smoking and similar activities but only after we acceded to her demands of a separate personal multimedia equipment and shopping trips, twice a month. It has been difficult for my wife, Sarah, to accustom herself to Kate’s changing behavior because of her controlling nature.
Everything had been running smooth for nearly six months until one day Sarah smelled acrid fumes on the terrace. She immediately recognized it as cigarette smoke because the fumes were achromatic and there was no apparent gas source available there. She summoned Kate and inquired about the weird smell to which she had no answer. She looked in another direction trying to keep herself from answering her mother’s question but my wife was quite annoyed and there was no way she was going to excuse her behavior this time.
Life without a boyfriend for the last 5 years must have addled her brain, I thought; as why would someone, otherwise respectful, disobey their parents and indulge in damaging hobbies. My wife, however, adduced other factors to her smoking problem too: her best friend, Megan, university’s ineffective student counselling department, and the advent of absurd fashion trends. To correct this behavior once and for all, Sarah went to her university the very next day. She reminded the counselling head to adhere to the rules and regulations mentioned in the university policy. After that, it was time for my daughter to receive one final admonition and without further ado, Sarah admitted Kate to a rehabilitation program. Smoking has not been the only adversity in our life. The incessantly falling Kate’s grades at university has also disturbed us emotionally. In Pakistan and the whole world, women have equal rights to everything as men, including equal educational opportunities and annual salary.
One day Kate came to me with a mathematics problem and not her mother, as she thinks of me as the affable one among her parents. After helping her, I went on to affix the new wheels I bought for the car the other day. It is that time of the year when I overhaul the car and some engine work is still afoot. The continuously worsening traffic has aggravated the already unbearable conditions of the roads and more and more potholes have started to surface randomly. According to the transportation department, an aggregate of 50,000 new vehicles join Karachi’s busy streets every year. Some people prefer motorbikes over cars because they see them as agile and an economical means of transportation but what they don’t understand is that bikes are susceptible to more accidents thanks to their exposed seating which can easily cause anyone to get hurt in an otherwise minor accident.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 332, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...weird smell to which she had no answer. She looked in another direction trying to k...
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Line 7, column 1011, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tional opportunities and annual salary. One day Kate came to me with a mathemati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, look, so, still, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.48453608247 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 5.05154639175 416% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 51.0 32.9175257732 155% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 26.3917525773 224% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 3.85567010309 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2631.0 937.175257732 281% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 511.0 206.0 248% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14872798434 4.54256449028 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 3.78020617076 126% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82278893595 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 302.0 127.690721649 237% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590998043053 0.622605031667 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 839.7 290.88556701 289% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 1.44329896907 485% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 12.6804123711 181% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.328692284 44.8134815571 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.391304348 76.5299724578 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2173913043 16.8248392259 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.39130434783 4.34317383033 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 1.49484536082 803% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146276009173 0.216113520407 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431799503781 0.0766984524023 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502343604682 0.0603063233224 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0867232831396 0.12726935374 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0113988870093 0.0580467560999 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 8.37731958763 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 70.7449484536 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 8.71597938144 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 7.59969072165 116% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 41.2886597938 320% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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