Many factors are related to success. Some people believe that people's look and wealth are essential factors that can lead to success, but I hold the view that people make achievements due to their efforts and determination.
Some people think that hard work and determination are essential for people to success since those with strong determination are more likely to cope with difficulties that appear on their way to achievements. Before achieving the target, undoubtedly, people may face massive problems. By working hard, diligent people are well-prepared for these obstacles and are more willing to insist. In contrast, not every problem can be stressed by money and appearance; without these necessary qualities, any other extra conditions do not work.
However, some other people perceive that one's look and wealth are more significant for success. The majority of people may need others' help to some extent before they make achievements. Wealth and good appearance enable people to get access to others, so they generally have more friends. With other people's help, people can know more experience or can even make use of other people's efforts and resources. Thus, rich or beautiful people are not necessarily to be hard-working themselves and can gain success more efficiently and effectively.
In my view, hard work and determination motivate people to learn more skills and knowledge applicable to success. With determination, people have more enthusiasm and do much training, which helps them perform better. For example, to become successful, a drawer commonly needs to try numerous times to create better artwork. However, that cannot be obtained simply by utilising money and appearance.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, so, thus, well, for example, in contrast, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39325842697 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86806785817 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573033707865 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7481336908 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0143034676021 0.244688304435 6% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00667817755113 0.084324248473 8% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0113057522672 0.0667982634062 17% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0101229661691 0.151304729494 7% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00727615076696 0.056905535591 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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