air travel can only benefit the richest people in the world. The ordinary people can get no advanteg with the development of air travel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
While many people argue that travelling by plane is beneficial for only the affluent class, I still believe that not only wealthy people but also ordinary citizens have merits from it.
On the one hand, I agree that the upper class are more thriving thanks to the advancement of air travel for several reasons. Firstly, air flights afford wealthy businessman more opportunities to manage their global chain of companies. Air travelling is known as the most convenient means of transport which allows travellers to commute to anywhere in the Earth in the short time. As the result, affluent business people can easily arrange their locomotive work, such as, arriving in China for the meeting in the morning and returning Canada in the same-day evening for the conference. Secondly, air trips associated with luxurious services and flying-related technology have become the recreation and leisure activities for the rich, which the ordinary people hardly think of owing to its expensiveness.
On the other hand, not only the up class over the world but also other classes in society are the beneficiaries of flights. Air travel has remarkably promoted local economy. This is evidenced by the fact that when travellers come, they spend much money for accommodation, tourist places and souvenirs which are the main source of income of many ordinary people. For example, in the tourist season, some Vietnamese people can earn enough for their whole year by selling Non la and Ao Dai, the traditional costumes of Vietnam, for travellers. Furthermore, travelling by aircraft offers employment opportunities to common man. Being hired by travel companies or airlines, ordinary citizens can easily get a suitable job such as cleaner, tourist guide and flying attendant.
In conclusion, I believe that to some extent, both the affluent and the poor can gain a better life from the increase in air flights.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18566775244 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77760218534 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589576547231 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0783056609 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.461538462 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6153846154 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3076923077 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317776446277 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108937461535 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464830796998 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189818253792 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373122573393 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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