The appearance of mass media plays a vital role in the modern life of human being as a marked milestone. While thin women are promoted by the media, there is a dark side to this picture which affects both individuals and society. I believe that the awareness of people is the key idea to cope with this circumstance.
Turning to the main issues of this argument, although the mass media is making an outstanding contribution in recent years, people still suffer from the information from it especially thin women as a debatable issue. First of all, if people try to keep a skinny body, it will bring some disease to their health. For example, celebrity in the television inspire hope into the body expectation of many people and they attempt to follow their idols. As a result, they will be at risk when they get addicted to this circumstance. Secondly, following thin idols in the television or magazines may have an impact on their daily life such as their work quality. According to the analysis of many scientists, they concretely prove that body can not meet the demand of physical activities due to the deficiency of food intake.
To deal with this problem, the governments should have some laws to minimize the harmful effects of information in the mass media. For instance, interviewing both advantages and disadvantages of thin people to strengthen the knowledge of people which is very essential. In addition, everyone may enhance their awareness in order to avoid the drawbacks of thin body because it can pose a threat to their routine life. Therefore, if they want to change themselves, they have to keep their eyes glued to the screen and take care of their health first.
In conclusion, based on the variety problems of this situation, I strongly believe that people may still do whatever they want but it’s essential when they pursue their dreams by a smart way.
The appearance of mass media plays a vital role in the modern life of human being as a marked milestone. While thin women are promoted by the media, there is a dark side to this picture which affects both individuals and society. I believe that the awareness of people is the key idea to cope with this circumstance.
Turning to the main issues of this argument, although the mass media is making an outstanding contribution in recent years, people still suffer from the information from it especially thin women as a debatable issue. First of all, if people try to keep a skinny body, it will bring some disease to their health. For example, celebrity in the television inspire hope into the body expectation of many people and they attempt to follow their idols. As a result, they will be at risk when they get addicted to this circumstance. Secondly, following thin idols in the television or magazines may have an impact on their daily life such as their work quality. According to the analysis of many scientists, they concretely prove that body can not meet the demand of physical activities due to the deficiency of food intake.
To deal with this problem, the governments should have some laws to minimize the harmful effects of information in the mass media. For instance, interviewing both advantages and disadvantages of thin people to strengthen the knowledge of people which is very essential. In addition, everyone may enhance their awareness in order to avoid the drawbacks of thin body because it can pose a threat to their routine life. Therefore, if they want to change themselves, they have to keep their eyes glued to the screen and take care of their health first.
In conclusion, based on the variety problems of this situation, I strongly believe that people may still do whatever they want but it’s essential when they pursue their dreams by a smart way.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1568.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85448916409 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69671350059 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56346749226 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4234593019 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0714285714 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6428571429 7.06120827912 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30063970724 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122828963773 0.084324248473 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.193554654744 0.0667982634062 290% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255294513816 0.151304729494 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.313220801386 0.056905535591 550% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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