Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Recently, the question of whether or not celebrities are treated unfairly by the media has been received a great deal of public attention. Although it is believed that the price of sought-after people is an invasion into their private life, I believe they should be given more privacy.
On the one hand, there are many reasons why the more people famous, the more their private life is interfered with. First when the public support and love someone, they have a tendency to curious about his life which leads to celebrities’ life becomes a hot issue. For example, when fans are madly in love with famous idols who are supported both money and loving by their fans, the fans will know more about their idols’ daily life so the idols should let their fans and public know more about them. Second, the private life of famous people should be shown which helps people realize whether or not they are backing good people. For instance, maybe someone will be very kind and nice when they are on stage, but in fact, they are bad people with a lot of unsuitable behaviors in their real life, so their private life should be shown for the public’s benefits.
On the other hand, I believe celebrities should be given more privacy since they are also people and they need private time for themselves, family, relationship,... It is annoying for famous people to be followed every day by journalists or fans. In fact, sometimes they will find it indeed hard to hang out with their friends or family because they are worried and tired about being taken pictures or surrounded, which can make them exhausted. Furthermore, it is really unfair that their family member’s behavior also can influence them. In fact, when a father, a mother or a brother of famous people doing something wrong, it will be a change for the media to exploit, the journalist will put idols name on the title of this newspaper to increase view but in this case, the famous people don’t do anything to be treated like that so it is immoral to them.
In conclusion, I believe that the media should not interfere too much with celebrities’ private life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: whether; the question whether
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'peopled'.
Suggestion: peopled
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...ime for themselves, family, relationship,... It is annoying for famous people to b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, really, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1764.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75471698113 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46007637932 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493261455526 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.4356362024 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.692307692 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5384615385 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.84615384615 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.420141946919 0.244688304435 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164298568633 0.084324248473 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877142531707 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26435133149 0.151304729494 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.089133728284 0.056905535591 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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