Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Recently, the question of whether or not celebrities are treated unfairly by the media have been received a great deal of public attention. Although it is believed that the price of sought-after people are an invasion into their private life, I believe they should be given more privacy.
On the one hand, there are many reasons why the more people famous, the more their private life are interferenced. First, when the public support and love someone, they have a tendency to curious about his life which lead to celebrities’ life become a hot issue. For example, when fans are madly in love with famous idols who are supported both money and loving by their fans,the fans will know more about their idols’ daily life so the idols should let their fans and public know more about them. Second, private life of famous people should be showed which helps people realize whether or not they are backing good people. For instance, maybe someone will be very kind and nice when they are on stage, but in fact they are bad people with a lot of unsuitable behaviours in their real life, so their private life should be showed for public’s benefits.
On the other hand, I believe celebrities should be given more privacy since they are also people and they need private time for themselves, family, relationship,... It is annoying for famous people to be followed everyday by journalist or fans. In fact, sometimes they will find it indeed hard to hang out with their friends or family because they are worried and tired about being taken pictures or surrounded, which can make them exhausted. Furthermore, it is really unfair that their family member’s behaviour also can influences them. In fact, when a father, a mother or a brother of famous people doing something wrong, it will be a change for the media to exploit, the journalist will put idols name on the title of this newspaper to increase view but in this case the famous people don’t do anything to be treat like that so it is immoral to them.
In conclusion, I believe that the media should not interference too much to celebrities’ private life
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
Recently, the question of whether or not celebrities are treated unfairly...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 376, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...rted both money and loving by their fans,the fans will know more about their idols’ ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 581, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ld be showed which helps people realize whether or not they are backing good people. For insta...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 91, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'peopled'.
Suggestion: peopled
... given more privacy since they are also people and they need private time for themselv...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 161, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...ime for themselves, family, relationship,... It is annoying for famous people to b...
^^
Line 5, column 523, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'influence'
Suggestion: influence
...heir family member’s behaviour also can influences them. In fact, when a father, a mother ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, really, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1759.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80601092896 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53675687002 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491803278689 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.7284724671 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.307692308 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1538461538 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.84615384615 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424167853736 0.244688304435 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16583407085 0.084324248473 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.088108003049 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265433606504 0.151304729494 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0844147073273 0.056905535591 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.