Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
In recent times, a growing body of adults and children are embarking on telecommuting as well as online learning by virtue of the accessibility and affordability of current technology. Even though this growing trend can be beneficial to our environment, I deem that it does more harm than good to each individuals.
On the one hand, the primary merit of telecommuting and virtual learning is their contribution to the pollution contraction in many large cities. Undoubtedly, due to the excessive emissions from transports of commuters or congestion during peak hours caused by a large volume of traffic on main road, a lot of urban centers suffer from severe air pollution. However, as adults and students work online at home, the number of vehicles can be greatly reduced which would greatly prevent traffic jam as well as noise pollution. As the pollution level is curbed in those cities, not only the environment itself benefit from this but also many residents will as they might enjoy fresher air and a more peaceful neighborhood .
On the other hand, I contend that the drawbacks generated by the upsurge in online working and studying are much more alarming. First of all, prolonged use of computers triggered a number of health implications. This can be exemplified by the fact that sitting in front of their computers for an undue amount of time can place users at risk of having a bad posture or eye problems like eye-strain. In the long run, these issues can be detrimental to one's health thus possibly reducing their efficiency. A second unfavorable effect of this trend is that it can be damaging to our communication skills, especially youngsters who require interaction with peers during their formative years to boost confidence and form a friendship. This can be ascribed to the fact that online learning methods often require less interpersonal interactions between learners. As a result, some students may fail to express themselves efficiently which will badly affected their team work skills as they cannot convey their ideas comprehensively.
In closing, even though our environment can benefit from the growing telecommuting and online studying, the disadvantages that individuals have to bear in terms of health and communication are much more concerning.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, thus, well, as a result, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1919.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20054200542 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04125637219 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577235772358 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.2096927644 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.071428571 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3571428571 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143718018851 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479746551016 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0361325780573 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0905601218543 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311921165147 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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