It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is a commonly-held belief that some children are gifted in a particular field, such as sport or music. However, it is also argued that youngsters can still be skilled at them through teaching and training. While both viewpoints have gathered concrete arguments, I believe that children can be taught the skills required to be competent.
On the one hand, this belief is a result of the media’s influence through the portrayal of various global figures. Mass media, such as newspapers and broadcasters, often have a wide coverage of famous people’s biography which emphasizes their background including their early years as gifted children. For example, music prodigies like Beethoven and Mozart are described to have displayed various musical abilities at a young age. With prominent examples like these, people are inclined to believe the existence of inborn talents that are possessed by certain individuals.
On the other hand, it appears to me that skilled sports players or musicians are the cultivation of learning rather than relying solely on innate talents. A compelling reason for this is that constant accumulation, training and perseverance are prerequisites to children’s proficiency. This can be ascribed to the fact that these factors allow the sharpening as well as memorization of the skills as repetition is an essential part of training. Mere inborn abilities, however, can only encourage each individual’s learning speed but not improve their skills in the long run. The teachability of many sets of skills and knowledge, be it in sports or music, can also explain why youngsters can become proficient individuals even without innate talents. This can be exemplified by music notes, song production or kicking techniques in football and a number of figures, like Messi or Ronaldo, who have excelled after rigorous training.
In conclusion, while some people are convinced by the media that innate talents are gifted to certain individuals, I deem that whoever children can master the skills in a specific field through diligent learning and training.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38719512195 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96906611314 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57012195122 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.510659285 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.214285714 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237011344181 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797000267201 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482518034702 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138683379279 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302497668999 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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