Increasing travels between countries enable people to learn about different cultures OR to increase tension between people from different countries. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Opinions differ greatly as to whether an increasing number of travels will facilitate cultural exchange or trigger cross-country tension. I deem that this trend is more likely to encourage cultural learning for the reason that transnational tourism allows travelers to have a comprehensive view of cultural differences.
Opponents of exceeding travels argue that the inappropriate behaviors caused by tourists may place strain on transnational relationships. Admittedly, due to the language barrier and restraint on information, tourists may not be cognizant of the indigenous culture or how to act properly in social situations to please the locals when traveling. For example, in a Muslim country, some tourists might disregard the seating seperation of men and women in a mosque. Consequently, they risk committing wrongdoings or having unseemly behaviors that are a catalyst for unwanted conflicts and misunderstanding. Furthermore, tourists who might upload these incidents on the Internet to attract attention could spread these negative remarks at an unprecedented pace. As a result, it can ultimately aggravate the whole situation if there are no clarifications, fueling the cultural tension in a particular country.
However, I contend that cross-country traveling plays an integral role in facilitating cross-cultural learning by offering travel enthusiasts an in-depth view of the differences between nations. Indeed, these journeys enable travelers to acquire first-hand experiences with an indigenous cultural quintessence such as its culinary, customs and traditions. Additionally, interaction with the locals affords travelers a more subjective and in-depth viewpoint on that culture. Altogether, this cross-cultural exposure allows visitors to form a different and more subjective mentality about the host country’s culture since they can listen from the locals' viewpoint. This change ultimately eases misapprehension thus transcending the barrier that prevents mutual exchange of knowledge. Without prejudices towards a particular culture, people are more willing to discover novel cultural facts and exchange knowledge.
In closing, while some people might believe that tourists may instigate transnational conflicts due to their insufficient knowledge of a country, I firmly agree that traveling provides an incentive to learn about other cultures.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, thus, while, as to, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 6.04437869822 5.12529762239 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37191543963 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612426035503 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.887001769 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.2 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5333333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264207454982 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768634593587 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855673415811 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157928322643 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0970038429071 0.056905535591 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 23.77 50.2224549098 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.05 12.4159519038 145% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.43 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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