Art is considered an important part of a society as well as an expression of its culture. Do you think it is important for children to be taught art? Do you think children should be encouraged to focus on art rather than other subjects?
It is argued that art is of vital importance to society as it serves to express the culture. Personally, I believe that children should be taught art. However, I would argue that it should not be the focus in school at the expense of other core subjects.
On the one hand, children should gain massive benefits from learning art subjects. As an expression of a society’s cultures, works of art reflect the way of life that a particular community has. They help children gain more insights into how their ancestors live and what they had achieved in the past, strengthening the bonds between them and their previous generations. For example, by observing pieces of art in historical museums, a Vietnamese student could understand the hardship which the generation of their grandparents had been through during America-Vietnam wars. As a result, they will feel a sense of responsibility to live up their ancestors’ expectations to be productive members of society.
However, other significant subjects in school, such as mathematics or literature, should not be sacrificed for art subjects. Despite fruitful benefits that having understandings of art may yield, art subjects should be optional rather than compulsory, which means that it is only for students with passion and willingness to learn. Many core subjects in our current curriculum have benefited children in a more direct way. For example, scientific ones, such as mathematics or physics, help students boost their critical thinking and problem-solving skills. Due to its profound impact on students, they should be seen as more important than art.
In conclusion, although art is essential to a person’s cultural identity, it should not be valued over subjects at school.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 70, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to art', 'to be'
Suggestion: to art; to be
...uld gain massive benefits from learning art subjects. As an expression of a society...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, then, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1464.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26618705036 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07424138532 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586330935252 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1144655871 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.571428571 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3960849698 0.244688304435 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146141768784 0.084324248473 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860913384842 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246859319728 0.151304729494 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785545243131 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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