Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people enjoy watching live events or shows broadcasted on TV, while others would prefer observing the same events in real time in person. While I agree that participate in a live show or event is exhilarating and interesting, I believe that watch the same versions recorded on TV would be more pleasing.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why many people enjoy attending a live event. Because the ambience in the auditorium is extremely stimulating, people might experience the amusement and the excitement, which is not provided by watching TV. Therefore, attendees might be entertained and free from the tension and anxiety. Additionally, people would have a great number of opportunities to improve their social skills. By attending live events, people could meet new people, and therefore they can make friends or they can interact with strangers such as asking them to take a photograph. Thus, take part in a real-time show is amusing.
On the other hand, I believe watching live events on TV would be more enjoyable. Firstly, buying a ticket for a live show is exorbitant while watching the same show is affordable. For example, a ticket for Tomorrowland Global Journey is approximately two thousand dollars. Meanwhile, people can watch it in real time on Youtube for free. Another reason is buying tickets could be difficult and strenuous. Because in order to buy a ticket, people might have to wait for a very long queue, beside some of them might not fond of staying in crowded place, people might feel inconvenient and exhausted. If they watch it at home, they would be more pleasant. Last but not least, people do not have to worry about being harmed. Staying in a crowded place could be dangerous and jeopardize lives. For example, players from Major League Baseball have done some damages to the spectators, luckily no one is deceased. Thus, watch live shows on TV is not a bad choice afterwards.
In conclusion, liking and disliking vary between people. While many people enjoy taking part in real-time shows, I would be more delighted to watch them on TV.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1736.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93181818182 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71958552042 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522727272727 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 535.5 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9922247419 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6666666667 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7619047619 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09523809524 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205284116697 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685804853047 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719531396051 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143813622708 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0727773394744 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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