The average standard of people s health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Essay topics:

The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many people beleive that the health condition of people is likely to reduced in the near future.These people argues that with the advancement of technology will result in less physical work for people.This essay will discuss how people health condition is likely to decrease in future.
It is a true fact that due to modern technology the physical workload of people have reduced alot.The modern day technologies have a huge impact on every sector of our life,people are relying heavily on these for there everyday activities,one can not imagine a world today without vehicles,E-commerce website and other automated machinery,It also made a negative effect on children,for instance children nowadays are likely to spend to spend their time playing mobile and computer games rather than going outside and play a physical sport,this is detroiting the physical and mental health of the younger ones.
However,some people beleive that with better medicine and medical facilities in upcoming years people's health will notice a positive growth,they also states that modern digital games required some physical work and high level of thinking which helps young children in their growing years for example the new play station introduce us to a virtual gaming world where one have to inact the physical movements to control their virtual avatar in game and it also require to solve many puzzle to move on in the game.
In conclusion,although there are some benefits of modern technology but the overall outcome comes negative and have a negative impact on one' health.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1313.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.252 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87611126349 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 62.0 20.2975951904 305% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 181.78197793 49.4020404114 368% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 328.25 106.682146367 308% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 62.5 20.7667163134 301% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.0 7.06120827912 241% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12054520401 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077855121933 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530299655704 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.077855121933 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530299655704 0.056905535591 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 34.5 13.0946893788 263% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 0.09 50.2224549098 0% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 28.7 11.3001002004 254% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.06 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.07 8.58950901804 129% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 31.0 9.78957915832 317% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.8 10.1190380762 265% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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