The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Write a report.

Essay topics:

The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Write a report.

The bar chart shows the proportion of people in Australia that partook in regular exercise grouped according to gender in the year 2010.

Overall, it can seen that there were more females that were involved in regular physical exercise than males in 2010.

In the female category, the 45-54 ,55-64 and 35-44 years age group had the highest number that participated in the regular exercise during the year 2010 with 53.3%,53%,52.5% respectively.The lowest among the women those that were in the 15-24 years and 65 and over ages which had 47.7% and 47.1% respectively.

On the other hand ,for males ,the youngest and the oldest of all age categories had the largest proportion of participants in physical activity with 52.8% and 47.7% respectively.The 35 to 44 years age group had the lowest percentage of men that partook in exercise and it had just below two fifths of people that exercised in 2010.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ifths of people that exercised in 2010.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 769.0 1615.20841683 48% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 152.0 315.596192385 48% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05921052632 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51124308557 4.20363070211 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78567734469 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 83.0 176.041082164 47% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546052631579 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 216.9 506.74238477 43% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 20.2975951904 187% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.3472800844 49.4020404114 199% => OK
Chars per sentence: 192.25 106.682146367 180% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.0 20.7667163134 183% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224949736573 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149218520225 0.084324248473 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551317232828 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149218520225 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551317232828 0.056905535591 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.4 13.0946893788 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.83 50.2224549098 99% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 78.4519038076 37% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.1190380762 170% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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