the charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

Essay topics:

the charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Given are two charts depicting the fluctuation in possessing electrical devices of citizens and the time spent on doing household during a 99-year period starting from 1920.
It is perceptible that both refrigerator and vacuum cleaner witnessed upward trend while washing machine saw a fluctuation in its tendency. On the other hand, with the popularity of electrical devices, people can pay less attention to housework.
Conspicuously, no one preserved their food in cold temperature in the earliest year. However, an increase in people knowledge lead to the dominance in the use of refrigerator, this device plunged to 90% in 1960,higher than any household electrical equipment that time. While washing machine witnessed a raising period, vacuum cleaner was another equipment that witnessed an exponential growth in a whole period. Possessed 30% in 1920, its tendency kept climbing up to 90% in 1980. In the latest two years, all residents were interested by refrigerator and vacuum cleaner. On the other hand, washing machine had a fluctuated trend, increased by 31% at the end of the period.
Regarding household hours, residents tended to ignore it day by day. With almost 50 hours spent on housework in a week, this number saw a remarkable drop in a 3 year-period starting form 1920. There were no changes in housework time until the latter 2000 that it reached 10 hours per week .

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...r 2000 that it reached 10 hours per week .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, regarding, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1164.0 1615.20841683 72% => OK
No of words: 226.0 315.596192385 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15044247788 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92841886006 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.619469026549 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 346.5 506.74238477 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8045702174 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 7.06120827912 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175527246187 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591410599449 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636303113885 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120522129945 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.071703376294 0.056905535591 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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