The charts show what the Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The charts show what the Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts illustrate information about the percentage of secondary graduates in term of unemployment, employed and further education in Australia over the course of 20 years starting in 1980.

Overall, the figure of unemployed people remained stable and accounted for a minority in total. While the school leavers tended to start a job, the opposite trend can be seen in the proportion of people who chose to attend school for further education.

In details, in 1980, the people going on studying made up the highest percentage at exactly one-twice of the total. Then, this figure declined gradually by 12% and nearly unchanged after 10 years. There was a minimal fluctuation in the percentage of unemployment, which started at 10%, increased slightly by 2% in 1990 and dropped to 8% at the end.

More significantly, the period witnessed a constant growth in the rate of school leavers who choose to go for a work from the percentage of 40 in 1980 and reached the peak at 55% in 2000.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 1.0 24.0651302605 4% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 837.0 1615.20841683 52% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 170.0 315.596192385 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92352941176 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 4.20363070211 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8436841935 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 176.041082164 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623529411765 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 244.8 506.74238477 48% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5522487955 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.571428571 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2857142857 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 7.06120827912 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103664262915 0.244688304435 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0425498020923 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442626521219 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0628115563734 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292736175276 0.056905535591 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 50.2224549098 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 78.4519038076 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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