Children should do organized activities in their free time while other believe that children should be free to do what they want. Discussed both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, some people believed that children should have plan activities in their free times. However, other people believed that children should be free to do what they want.
Admittedly, there are some arguments in favor of children should do organized activities in their free times. First, plan activities of young people are believed to equalize opportunities among young adolescents regardless of their background. This organized support, presumably tends not only to increase the overall reasonable time control of young students but also to mitigate their feeling of lazies in their free times, which eventually promotes a knowledge society. Second, organized activities would probably result in a greater supply of highly qualified workers, which benefits society in the long run. In fact, it is acknowledged that suits plans and knowledgeable human capital is imperative to foster economic growth and technological development in any nations.
Nevertheless, the resultant problems would be far more significant than the minor benefits once children can’t free to do what they want. First, can’t do anything in their free time would likely correspond with a tremendous study pressure strain on a country. Relaxing no from free times and hobbies, students could become over pressured and can’t control it, meaning that there would be less input to develop other important areas such as the healthcare system and family love. Second, children organized their free times would tempt many problems including those who are not academically inclined or show no interest in college pursuits because they can’t free to do what they want and more control about it, thereby adding great burdens for university admissions and control their relationships and potentially wasting time that these young people have spent pursuing more suitable part-time activities. It, instead, would be a more free time activities viable option if the resources focus on both study and free times.
I were discussed both sides of the arguments. In my perspective, this argument has some advantages but has more disadvantages for society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 269, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... pressure strain on a country. Relaxing no from free times and hobbies, students c...
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Line 4, column 3, Rule ID: PERS_PRONOUN_AGREEMENT_SENT_START[3]
Message: Did you mean 'was'?
Suggestion: was
... focus on both study and free times. I were discussed both sides of the arguments. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49085365854 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77826551918 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560975609756 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.8134722092 49.4020404114 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.642857143 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21428571429 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.462329751102 0.244688304435 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180010984675 0.084324248473 213% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154640750933 0.0667982634062 232% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287219806894 0.151304729494 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.176883497865 0.056905535591 311% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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