Computer technologies are more accessible and cheaper, as the result, more adults work at home and children study at home.
Is this a positive or negative development?
Since the advent of technological gadgets, computers has facilitated humans in various aspects of life. They are not only more affordable but also give individuals chance to work and study from home. Therefore, I believe this is an optimistic tendency in the new era.
On the one hand, those who are constantly exposed to computers may encounter some physical and mental problems. Health problems such as near-sightedness and obesity are the common consequences of sitting and staring at the screen for a long time. However, it is just an excuse to blame for computers when they lead such a sedentary lifestyle with little or no workout. Another drawback could be the lack of communication which might be the cause of isolation and autism. This idea seems to be unrealistic because the Internet has bridged the gap of physical distance and let people stay updated any time.
I think the pros of having a computer are far more its cons. Firstly, thanks to the Internet access, both employees and students are able to keep up with their work and study, especially during the breakout of Covid-19. If the computers were less accessible and more pricey, we would not imagine how collapsing the world would be. What is more, the Internet world has opened up a new opportunities for freelancers who are not willing or able to work in the office. They now can earn money and doing housework at the same time so do the school children.
In conclusion, although some detrimental effects of working and studying in front of the screen are unavoidable, I would argue computers have changed out lives in a positive way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... argue computers have changed out lives in a positive way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, therefore, i think, in conclusion, such as, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1342.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77235466945 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.4652383511 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8571428571 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6428571429 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256920351105 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720023471921 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527558457374 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139121223035 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613392627971 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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