In countries where there is a high rate of unemployment, most pupils should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is argued that in some nations which unemployment rate consistently is higher than the others, most of the students should be attended in primary schools. And it is no good in giving an opportunity to who do not hope to land a future job in order to pursue secondary schools. In my opinion, i totally disagree with this statement due to some below reasons.
Advocating of that fact that studying in primary schools and not going to secondary ones may believe that it is one of the optimal way to alleviate the financial burden for the government as they do not spend an amount of public money on the school expansion, teacher training fees, and then this means could be used to buy foods, drinks to remote areas without contributions from the local. From my perspective, this is a short-sighted view since this strategy may lead to the the quality of labour workforce. Due to intuitive knowledge and insufficient understanding about higher technology , primary children are unlikely to meet the demand for technological globe.
Further more, i still do not agree with the idea that it is no worth offering educational chances for some people who do not have an ambition finding a job because this may lead to some dire consequences related to crime rate. In fact, secondary children might have a stronger desire to express their unique character at all cost even being addicted to alcohol, committing the crime, so they should proceed to study in secondary school to have deeper insight in psychology and laws.
In my conclusion , it is a good idea for the government take priority over all type of schooling to develop the quality of citizens and national economy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, may, second, so, still, then, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1388.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85314685315 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77804686197 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590909090909 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.2998831791 49.4020404114 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.222222222 106.682146367 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7777777778 20.7667163134 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255933411822 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0956589609901 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787065826686 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138955878189 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106165869068 0.056905535591 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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