In countries where there is high unemployment, most pupils should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that in countries which are suffering from high rates of unemployment, it seems hardly worthwhile to offer education beyond primary level to most pupils. While I accept that this appears logical, I believe that this is a very narrow perspective, and I completely disagree with the statement.
Firstly, the prediction of upturns and downturns in the job market is extremely difficult. At one period there may be a demand for workers in many sectors of a country’s economy. Wages are high, and the education system needs to prepare large numbers of students up to and beyond secondary school level, with the skills to meet the needs of employers. For example, while technology is replacing many traditional jobs in such areas as agriculture, transport and heavy industry, it is also creating new jobs in other sectors. Thus, in economic terms, it is almost impossible to say how many highly-educated young people will be required for a nation’s workforce.
Secondly, I contend that the purpose of education is much more fundamental than simply to prepare young people for the world of work. Education is nothing less than the acquisition of lifelong skills in thinking critically about all aspects of life. At its best, secondary education plays an essential part of helping young people to develop these critical skills. If the citizens of a country are informed and enlightened, problems such as
a welfare system or the distribution of wealth can be intelligently debated. Without mass education to this level, a country can have no responsible citizens.
In conclusion, although in today’s volatile global economy, any country’s employment situation is subject to rapid changes, the intangible but real objectives of education dictate that young people should be educated to at least secondary level.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 27, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun support seems to be countable; consider using: 'many supports'.
Suggestion: many supports
...endent. To recapitulate, although many support the view that earning from childhood is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, at least, in general, in particular, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1797.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 358.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01955307263 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.652426954 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525139664804 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 557.1 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.6946175515 49.4020404114 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.230769231 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5384615385 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.84615384615 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169424499886 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655475637441 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0346443649004 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107720367306 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292883389705 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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