In countries where there is high unemployment, most pupils should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people believe that in a country with high employment where the labor market is fiercely competitive, only those who are academically able should further their education beyond the primary level. I completely disagree with this view for various reasons.
On the one hand, the primary academic record does not provide a full picture of a student’s ability. Students in their formative years rarely take studies and school work seriously enough to produce the kind of result which relatively reflect their academic abilities. Indeed, some intellectually spurt ahead only in their final year of secondary or college level, primary school results are therefore a poor indicator of student’s abilities. Therefore it is insensible and ill-conceived to decide for a student whether or not to continue their higher education merely based on his or her primary school record.
On the other hand, limiting higher education to students does not only aggravate the problem of employment but also circumspect careers and the future of students. In countries where unemployment is high, the increase in the number of unskilled and ill-educated workers inevitably leads to a mounting unqualified workforce either superfluous to manual occupations or unfitted to perform other higher demanding jobs. Furthermore, a society moving away from higher education will undermine students’ prospects of career and thus their future as they would not be equipped with enough knowledge and offered an environment supposedly to cultivate their academic potentials.
In conclusion, restricting students to primary education is not an appropriate approach to unemployment in any country. This retrograde step will have a detrimental effect both on the economy and students’ future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1517.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66044776119 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11048813607 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615671641791 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6112752106 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.909090909 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3636363636 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.90909090909 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153443976185 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590785076073 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456013691879 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101032418483 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460524847391 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.84 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.19 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.