Dangerous sports such as car racing and boxing should be banned altogether. Do you support this proposal?
Sports are regarded as an indispensable form of entertainment and art which give impetus to the development of the economy and culture. However, there are innumerable sports nowadays containing high risk of injuries and blatant displays of violence. There have been some notions stating that these kinds of sports should be prohibited to prevent undesirable consequences. As far as I’m concerned, completely approve of this proposal.
First and foremost, these violent physical activities should be discouraged since violence has nothing to do with the basic philosophy of sports. The primary aim of sportmanship has always been crystal clear since time immemorial, which is to provide the opportunity for individuals to pit their natural and perceptual talents. More importantly, sports also promote the spirit of brotherhood and inculcate a sense of disciplines and safety. As a result, participants should be engaged in a safe, fair and inclusive environment instead of subjecting themselves to competitions imbued with excessive and dangerous use of force.
Additionally, sports such as car racing and wrestling may take their excruciating toll on the athletes. Sports which require brutal body contacts between players or risky activities are highly susceptible to serious accidents and injuries. When performing death-defying stunts, athletes are in a constant risk of facing minor to life-threatening injuries, which in some cases may even lead to fatality. The consequences of these accidents are sometimes devastating, as they include emotional trauma, permanent immobility and vegetative states.
Extreme sports can also be considered a catalyst for aggressive tendency among millenials nowadays. Sports such as boxing, rugby or ice hockey have no doubt gained a surge in popularity, and to make use of this advantage, TV sponsorships and stations decide to invest a huge amount of budget into broadcasing and promoting these sports. Because of this, many spectators, especially teenagers, are easily exposed to the brutal graphics where two opponents are trying to take down each other with blood-stained faces. As a result, they are highly likely to emulate those acts of brutality in real life since adolescents are still too young to work on their emotions and be cognizant of the influences around them.
To recapitulate, the proliferation of extreme sports in the sporting field has raised the alarm about the the normalization of violence in our contemporary culture. Therefore, it is safe to conclude that sports which spread roots of barbarity and suffering must be given a ban.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, no doubt, such as, as a result, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2213.0 1615.20841683 137% => OK
No of words: 401.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5187032419 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13136138055 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618453865337 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 506.74238477 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7769073477 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.944444444 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2777777778 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22466237405 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619326054745 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469483273472 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113642853322 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165558302152 0.056905535591 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.12 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 78.4519038076 175% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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