Some people think that the purpose of museums should be to attract and entertain young people. Others believe that the purpose of a museum is to educate, not entertain. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion
Museums seem to have a universal appeal among people, along with this attraction is the opposing views on their true function. Some people deem museums as a place to engage and educate community while others regard that the primal purpose of museums is to fulfill people's recreational needs.
On one hand, museums are making their way to become one of the starring roles in education. They provide visitors with a bank a knowledge in the form of sculptures, arts and a wide collection of artifacts. In other words, they are the reservoir for civilization's heritage. Thus, museum exhibits can expose museum-goers to in-depth information on innumerable subjects, hence offer them profound insights into historical contexts and the cultures, beliefs and morals of different countries.
Furthermore, most students may have difficulties in understanding scientific principles through
books because textbooks and paper handouts can be very abstract and dry. Going on field trips or museum exhibitions reinforces what students have learned from their tutors and help them
comprehend the topics better.
At the same time, museums have also succeeded in delivering leisure enjoyment for the public. Aside from learning, vistors may as well have the opportunity to immerse themselves in an engagingatmosphere. Some museums, especially those called "virtual museums", are now offering visitors with experiments or attractive programs and events to enhance interactivity and keep the viewers
absorbed. Additionally, museums are also a never-ending source of inspiration and genuine pleasure through the encounters of great artworks and masterpieces.
To conclude, as far as I am concerned, since entertainment can act as a powerful gateway to
education, the ethical code of museums should also be broadened to provide entertaining
elements. Therefore, I think it is vital that museums should strive for the balance between educational opportunities and recreational fulfillment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 30, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'knowledge'.
Suggestion: knowledge
...ion. They provide visitors with a bank a knowledge in the form of sculptures, arts and a w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, while, i think, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.87074829932 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28698162908 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.663265306122 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.4233330359 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.769230769 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6153846154 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07692307692 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 22.0 4.38176352705 502% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273371393486 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799221545116 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833896046708 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0663876843708 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0647382502016 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.06 12.4159519038 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.58 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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