The speeding up of life in some fields like travel and communications are having a negative effect on our society at the individual, national and international levels. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Today, in the modern world of instantaneous communications
and high-speed travel, the tempo of life has accelerated immensely. There has been
some stances stating that this phenomenon may have a detrimental impact on
society on a personal, national and global scale. In my opinion, i partially agree
with the notion, because despite the problem it arises, this sensation also has
numerous economical merits which are beneficial for a country’s welfare.
First and foremost, from a personal perspective, with the mounting workload and a
poor work-life imbalance , quick tempo of life wreaks havoc on people’s health
and relationships. Spending more and more time studying and working hard in
such competitive environment to enhance their future prospects, hardly do people
have enough time to take proper care of themselves. They are also highly prone to
stress, pressure and frustration due to the demands and expectations of a fast-action
society. Furthermore, a busy schedule can deter individuals from spending time
with their peers and families, eventually leading to many shortcomings in
interaction and social skills as well as breaking families apart.
At the same time, on a national scale, the advancement of means of travelling and
communication opens avenues for a sustainable economy. Transportation is one of
the most fundamental sectors of the economy since it enhances connection between
businesses and their markets, provides accessibility and increases opportunities for
trading and cooperation between nations. Additionally, apart from transportation,
communication system is deemed as one of the primal contributors to the
prosperity of a nation. It helps industrialists and business communities to take right
decisions at right time by providing them information and news related with the
business. What is more, communication also helps citizens develop their social
capital and achieve social equality by providing education and raise awareness
among communities.
Finally, the increasing pace of life, reflected in many environmental and political
aspects, is causing great trouble to humans. The rapid process of globalization has
resulted in severe exploitation of natural resources as well as the deterioration of
the environment. More importantly, many countries are inventing more dangerous
war weapons to keep pace with the global development and compete for
supremacy throughout the world. Many arm races have posed existential threat to
human kind, hence, endanger world peace and security.
In conclusion, life in a fast lane is clearly a double-edged sword as this trend can
motivate society to reach for new capacities or potentials, yet it still bears many
menacing risks. While governments must seek for different measures to mitigate
its profound effects, individuals should also learn how to slow down their hectic
life and start approaching obligations and responsibilities with a more natural
rhythm.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 25, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, still, well, while, apart from, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 10.4138276553 250% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.3376753507 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2581.0 1615.20841683 160% => OK
No of words: 443.0 315.596192385 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.82618510158 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26191058565 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 176.041082164 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627539503386 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 792.0 506.74238477 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0911872665 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.388888889 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6111111111 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11111111111 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 37.0 4.38176352705 844% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144139446183 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.043754149295 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412726968469 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0293027699565 0.151304729494 19% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354868199906 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.83 12.4159519038 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.78 8.58950901804 126% => OK
difficult_words: 167.0 78.4519038076 213% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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