The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West park secondary school since its construction in 1950.

Essay topics:

The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West park secondary school since its construction in 1950.

The given diagram illustrates the changes in West park secondary school since its establishment in 1950 to 2010.
Overall, it can be seen from the diagram that the houses and farmland were totally replaced whereas the school area was expanded.

In 1950, on the main road, there was three rows of houses which were removed by car park and science block in 1980. Similarly, the farmland behind house building was eliminated by sports field in 1980. And, the school as well as playground remained same from 1950 to 1980.

However, In 2010, the sports field was emerged with playground area. there was no change in science block between 1980 and 2010 whereas the the car parking area was expanded in 2010 as it covers the space of sports field as well which shrinked. The playground areas also contracted at the end of year 1980 which was unchanged from 1950 to 1980.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...chool since its establishment in 1950 to 2010. Overall, it can be seen from the...
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...d whereas the school area was expanded. In 1950, on the main road, there was thr...
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...ground remained same from 1950 to 1980. However, In 2010, the sports field was e...
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Suggestion: There
...field was emerged with playground area. there was no change in science block between ...
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Suggestion: the
...nce block between 1980 and 2010 whereas the the car parking area was expanded in 2010 a...
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Line 6, column 137, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
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Suggestion: the; the
...nce block between 1980 and 2010 whereas the the car parking area was expanded in 2010 a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, second, similarly, so, well, whereas, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 4.0 24.0651302605 17% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 720.0 1615.20841683 45% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 151.0 315.596192385 48% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76821192053 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.50545371207 4.20363070211 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31549546137 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 83.0 176.041082164 47% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549668874172 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 189.0 506.74238477 37% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8738117656 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.875 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.875 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188488633015 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105114966812 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145114050594 0.0667982634062 217% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173876131617 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.176571583333 0.056905535591 310% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 50.2224549098 156% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.3001002004 60% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 78.4519038076 34% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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