Due to the development and rapaid expansion of supermarket in some countries. Many small, local business are unable compete some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities.

Essay topics:

Due to the development and rapaid expansion of supermarket in some countries. Many small, local business are unable compete some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities.

In local business is one of the main income as local communities where they utilize of contraction subsidies from government, and it is impossible to compete with the other. It is influence the society if the local business will be closing.

In some countries that the communities establish their business have gotten enough income to their daily life therefore it is becoming their primary livelihood. The negative effects will be happen if always growing down more over dosed by official who have authorities of it. For instance, in one of province in Indonesia has gone up construction is used by communities to start their business, but base on the requirement of government they must pay the tax. At the present the super traditional market which is one of container experience decrease extremely because many modern business such us cafes, mall together with others that are more popular and have bigger number of visitors than in market as result with this matter the figure of unemployment is booming in contrast level of welfare in public will influenced by less of occupation then encourage criminalization. In conclusion, to close the local business is not the best may for society.

In other side, it depend on government policy where we can see in from the solution that is given. First of all if government want close the local business with restructure construction to be better than before it will appreciated by people secondly, the tax which is must paid then based on their finding in order to the communities can sale along with calm. In addition, it is present to people who do not have works as if it can becoming their livelihood purposes.

To sum up, I believe that this happen will be finished by government authorities where they can handle it at all, therefore the competition in the both of level business will be balance.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 812, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'influence'
Suggestion: influence
...ontrast level of welfare in public will influenced by less of occupation then encourage cr...
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Line 5, column 19, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'depends'?
Suggestion: depends
...st may for society. In other side, it depend on government policy where we can see i...
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Line 5, column 220, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'appreciate'
Suggestion: appreciate
...uction to be better than before it will appreciated by people secondly, the tax which is mu...
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Line 5, column 274, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have paid' or 'pay'?
Suggestion: have paid; pay
... people secondly, the tax which is must paid then based on their finding in order to...
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Line 5, column 433, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'become'
Suggestion: become
...ople who do not have works as if it can becoming their livelihood purposes. To sum up...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... do not have works as if it can becoming their livelihood purposes. To sum up, ...
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Line 7, column 69, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is happen will be finished by government authorities where they can handle it at ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1549.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93312101911 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81707295548 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528662420382 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.6364500518 49.4020404114 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.818181818 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5454545455 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5454545455 7.06120827912 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19798029319 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901888469416 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0817470286654 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142030681025 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.08469470336 0.056905535591 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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