Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small local business are unable to compete, Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities.
To what extend do you agree or disagree.
In the modern world, as a result of the high penetration of supermarkets, many local businesses have died out. Although it is agrued that the decimation of small-scale enterprises will result in the disappearance of local societies, I totally disagree with this point of view.
Many new supermarkets and shopping malls are emerging all over the world. It is difficult for small businesses in local areas to compete with them. There are several reasons for this. Firstly, beautiful architectures and other facilities attract more and more people towards supermarkets. Shopping is no longer just buying things, but it is also a kind of entertainment for people in modern society. Secondly, supermarkets make shopping easier for people as they can buy all the items which are necessary in one place. Going to different shops for getting different items is tedious and time-consuming. Thirdly, the merchandises are various and competitive in the supermarket so that shoppers can buy foods at lower prices compared with buying at local stores.
However, the closure of local businesses will not lead to the death of a community. People live happily in localities even if local shops are not available. As a result of the growth of technology and the global economy, people now have enough money and transportation facilities to travel to big markets in distant places. Therefore it is not necessary for them to depend on nearby local shops to meet their needs. For example, metro trains which can take people faster to shopping malls are now available. On the other hand, communities still survive through social events, clubs, or other institutions in society. Also, there are a number of shops which will not be affected by supermarkets due to their unique goods such as traditional or top quality products.
In conclusion, although the termination of regional shops may affect the local communities negatively to a small extent, it will not threaten their existence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ave died out. Although it is agrued that the decimation of small-scale enterprise...
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Suggestion: Therefore,
...ravel to big markets in distant places. Therefore it is not necessary for them to depend ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, third, thirdly, as to, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19435736677 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95460823295 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551724137931 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.6491961746 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0555555556 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7222222222 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2222222222 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22960501304 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821787217609 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822419893526 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150287357348 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372212067007 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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