However, our modern universe provides us a different life which is easier and more convenience there are some drawbacks in comparison with the past. Older people in the contemporary era are not as happy as their parents were because they do not meet the other persons routinely and also they suffer from many diseases which did not exist in previous years and this is because of low level of exercising they have. Some of important reasons for this fact have been explained concisely in the following sentences and in continue some solutions have been offered in order to improve an elder's situation.
first of all, it is confirmed by all people that human being has traded modern lifestyle by getting loneliness. Nowadays, our old parents live in high skyscrapers solely without any interactions with the others even their neighbors. Also, some values in many nations have been degraded by the rise of industrialism and one of them is caring the older father and mothers. For example, in eastern cultures, there was a tradition that children kept their parents in their home for protecting them physically and mentally but this tradition has been vanished in new generations. On the other hand, the advent of technology has made the life comfortable without so-called problems but this has taught humans to be inactive and lazy. Despite of many progresses in medical sciences we can not neglect a level of activity that anyone particularly an old person should have. For instance, many new inventions such as online buying, social medias have decreased the outgoing hours of retired people and this has resulted in many health challenges for this segment of societies.
Secondly, although there are unfavorable circumstances but also governments and politicians could organize some plans as efficient solutions. Municipalities should construct some places in parks for elders in order to gather them together and make them more socialized with the aim of mitigating loneliness. Also the organizations which are responsible for promoting sport and exercising in cities should hold some events and competitions for some specific ages to encourage retired people for sport and healthier life.
To summarize, youngsters should watch out carefully their grandparents and also they have to care them emotionally by meeting them constantly and contacting them day by day. And simultaneously rulers should consider long-term programs and enough budget for old people to improve the quality.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 156, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR
Message: The proper name in singular (Older) must be used with a third-person verb: 'peoples'.
...acks in comparison with the past. Older people in the contemporary era are not as happ...
Line 1, column 585, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'elders'' or 'elder's'?
Suggestion: elders'; elder's
...ave been offered in order to improve an elders situation. first of all, it is conf...
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
...der to improve an elders situation. first of all, it is confirmed by all people t...
Line 5, column 92, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
...ces but also governments and politicians could organize some plans as efficient s...
Line 5, column 310, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
... with the aim of mitigating loneliness. Also the organizations which are responsible...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2096.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 397.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27959697733 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81964695012 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561712846348 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.7903038587 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.733333333 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4666666667 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185740775469 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594654105595 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556974585976 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115518379107 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0813379028809 0.056905535591 143% => OK
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 78.4519038076 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 9.78957915832 189% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.