“ Failure is proof that the desire wasn’t strong enough”. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
It is widely argued that failure is considered as a clue proving the desire wasn’t strong enough. Personally, although I agree with this view, but I assume that success depends on other aspects, not only your passion.
In the one hand, the desire contributes to a biggest part in success process based on two major reasons. One reason is that the desire creates motivation for every person, that prevent them from decoy. For instance, Nguyen Ngoc Ki - a famous teacher writing by legs instead of hand because he was disabled child when he was a child. He said that he used to give up many times, but his dynamic did not allow him, thus he is persistent until the end. Another reason is that the desire turns into real action, every person should have responsibility for yourself. As far as I know, in order to be success, people need to have responsible for your own work. For example, Bill gates said that he arranged workload effectively in order to gain the highest outcome.
In the other hand, I believe that failure based on other aspects including situation or experience. Firstly, situation is important factor deciding the success. According to the statistics in Vietnam, 735 projects coming from young people are refused because it is lack of capital. Additionally, experience is a crucial element as well which only attained by practicing. Nowadays, the majority of young people are not as prominent as mature people since they lack of some skills such as communication skill or interpersonal skill. Thus, there are various reasons bringing success in spite of passion.
In conclusion, I believe that people should practice carefully in order to avoid failure.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 44, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...the one hand, the desire contributes to a biggest part in success process based o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1399.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97864768683 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68547436157 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619217081851 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.676994813 49.4020404114 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.4375 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5625 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104623470527 0.244688304435 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357566488084 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861571240548 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0892695751753 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134275662754 0.056905535591 236% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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