Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up To what extent do you agree or d | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Recently, the phenomenon of maternal and paternal responsibilities and its corresponding impacts have sparked a long-running dispute. In this regard, whereas a remarkable number of individuals believe that motherhood comes first, others are of the opinion that fathers should accept as much roles as mothers about rearing children. In my mind, in today’s modern societies fatherhood should be emphasized as much as motherhood in terms of children’s upbringing as well as psychological aspects.
Obviously, deciding to have babies is not as simple as buying a toy. It depends on both father and mother’s attitudes and moods. Hence, the responsibility of children’s rearing should be placed on shoulders of both parents, instead of merely mothers. Moreover, nowadays’ difficult living conditions pave the way to the fact that both parents are inevitable to engage in whether full-time or part-time jobs. Consequently, the role of both parents must be taken into consideration at the same level.
Furthermore, babies are psychologically dependent on both mom and dad. For instance, youngsters consider their father as super heroes, while their mother was beheld like kind angels. Thus, fathers should promote their roles as well as their responsibilities to do with bringing children up at least to the level of mothers’. According to scientists’ findings, in miscellaneous cases, daughters are more dependent on their fathers rather than mothers.
On the other hand, we shouldn’t lose sight of opponents. They elucidate that mothers are the only parents who must deal with such children’s issues as deciding to become parent, which school pupils should be sent, and what kind of diet they have to follow. However, fathers’ responsibilities are restricted financial support and providing the family with purchasing far bigger and more convenient houses, cars, and that sort of thing. They maintain that fathers are would-be monarchs in the realm of their homes.
To sum up, despite compelling arguments on both sides, I opt to vigorously support the idea that fathers out to undertake more responsibilities about children’s rearing. By the way, the foundation of households is strengthened on two same size pillars of mother and father.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... its corresponding impacts have sparked a long-running dispute. In this regard, whereas a rema...
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Line 1, column 287, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...e opinion that fathers should accept as much roles as mothers about rearing children...
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Line 1, column 363, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'societies'' or 'society's'?
Suggestion: societies'; society's
...children. In my mind, in today’s modern societies fatherhood should be emphasized as much...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, well, whereas, while, at least, for instance, kind of, sort of, as well as, by the way, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18884218696 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597701149425 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9865788258 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.333333333 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8888888889 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223331324932 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614838999284 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498277814458 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11594757861 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0229625860629 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments