Government investment in the arts such as music and theatre is a waste of money Governments must invest this money in public services instead To what extent do you agree with this statement

Essay topics:

Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?

It is basic responsibility of institution to provide all necessary services to public. The authorities spending money on the any department of art like music and thearter equivalent to wastage, it should be used in most urgent problems of society in public services. The government should pay more attention toward education, health and other important issues like poverty although art is also important. But more spending should be on to provide basic necessities of life. In this essay we will discuss crucial problems which need urgent solution with comparison to art industry.
The essential and immediate concern is hunger which effecting people in world. In this planet where individuals could not find clean water and nutritious components, its look extravagant to invest in Art. For instance, in Africa 85 percent children are malenutrient and many other peopless in third world country facing same problem.
Next big and important requirment and right of everyone is good education which is also neglected field. The nations that have limited revenue effects the litracy and schooling. Instead of going to institutes and schools children worked because of least perfer sector for government, and this mainly due to less resources. This effct can be obsereved in research finding coming out of first world countries.
The country where most people do not have access to primary healthcare opertunities. The public who can afford went abroad for their treatment, whereas person with no money die because of not upto standard conditions. In India, there is only 1 maternity home for 500 females which is not adiquite for large population.
Howere, Art is effective way of expressing its culture in form of music and dramas through which tradition spread in world. It provide entertainmet for general public at low cost. Investing in art would take it into great hight and its only accetable only if all other services of life are completed.
In conclusion, Although art is mandotary field and need offical appreciation too but mankind demand basic neccessities and its required money. I completely agree with second point about investment on human which requir food, education and healthy life style which is their sole right and institution obligation to provide them.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, so, third, whereas, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 364.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27747252747 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74572897302 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612637362637 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3269573368 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.05 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213744269866 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525177871815 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041525456249 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0970418985086 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303045499274 0.056905535591 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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