The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to control violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this action?
Some media watchdogs suggest that the violence in films and on television should be censored to curb violent crimes in society. In my opinion, I totally agree with this idea because violent movies and TV programs have ability to affect people’s thoughts and behaviors, and support potential criminals to sin.
Violent films have a profound impact on personality developments of viewers, leading them to act violently. Most of popular action movies often contribute heroic characters which tend to resolve conflicts through violence, rather than legal consultation but they are always highly regarded. Therefore, viewers, especially children and teenage, believe that if they imitate these role models, their behavior can reap applause from others. However, in most cases, their actions evolve into violent crimes. For example, my nephew, after watching “Power Rangers” film, often hits his friends and cousins with his toy weapons and shouts “super hero, attack!”. When I asked him why he acted like that, he said that “the heroes in film often do that”. It is clear that this action film is the main reason causes his violence.
Some TV shows such as war documentaries and crime reports also open up the possibility of viewers engaging into violence. Some crime reports describe all details of law-offending practices such as robbery, burglary and shoplifting. Meanwhile, some war documentaries present a whole process of produce weapons or drugs. As a result, it looks like instructive material for prospective crimes to study. One example is a criminal case in Vietnam, a man tried to extract narcotics from veterinary medicine after watching a crime report about produce and smuggle drugs.
In conclusion, the violence in films and TV shows can impact on audiences ‘s thoughts and behaviors then leads them to act violently or even crimes. Therefore, it is necessary for government to take an action to prevent this problem through controlling violent movies and TV programs.
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Suggestion:
...rolling violent movies and TV programs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, then, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in most cases, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44761904762 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85734743536 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64126984127 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7234488581 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.25 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6875 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220346799164 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068588131139 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657385221606 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140631956752 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721014715738 0.056905535591 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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