The graph shows level of online shopping by age group for different times of the day Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The graph shows level of online shopping by age group for different times of the day.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the percentage of shopping on the Internet in the different period of the day by five groups of age from 16 to over 60 years old in 2015.

Overall, the number of sales in most of age groups start to increase remarkably from 9 a.m and the time has the most of the sales is between 6 pm to 8 pm and then it decreases dramatically from 10 am to the midnight. However, over-60-years-old group has some differences with the others, the quantity of customers in this group changes in a fluctuation.

Firstly, age group from 25-34 years old has a large number of sales in almost time of the day in comparison with another groups. There is a considerable rise from 9 am and then peak at approximately 32% of sales.

Secondly, 3 age groups include 16-24, 35-44 and 45-59 have similarity in their growth but the group 35-44 has a sharp increase start at 4 pm and reach a maximum rate of online shopping about 30%.

Finally, the level of online shopping in group over 60 years old fluctuates between 9 am and 2 pm. It hit a peak at 9 am about 20% and it start to decline notably from 2 pm to the midnight.

Votes
Average: 8.8 (8 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 7.30460921844 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 5.0 24.0651302605 21% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 912.0 1615.20841683 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 212.0 315.596192385 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.30188679245 5.12529762239 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68929155557 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 176.041082164 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495283018868 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 263.7 506.74238477 52% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.60771543086 75% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.7793621624 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.625 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197330872949 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.094544929041 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693293772933 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124157487187 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045798152309 0.056905535591 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.93 50.2224549098 157% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.96 12.4159519038 64% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 78.4519038076 41% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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