The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care
system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the
best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in
the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Owing to the problems which a growing population of overweight people cause for
the health care system, some people think that the key to solving these issues is to
have more sport and exercise in schools. In my opinion, I completely agree that this
is the best way to tackle the issue of deteriorating public health in relation to weight.
Firstly, dealing with the issues surrounding obesity and weight problems is best
solved by taking a long term approach and introducing more sport and exercise in
schools. This method will ensure that the next generation will be healthier and will
not have such health problems. At the moment, the average child in the West does
sport possibly twice a week, which is not enough to counteract their otherwise
sedentary lifestyle. However, by incorporating more sports classes into the
curriculum as well as encouraging extracurricular sports activities, they will
undoubtedly become fitter and more active.
Another point to consider is that having more sports lessons for children in schools
will probably result in children developing an interest in exercise which might filter
through to other members of their family and have a longer lasting effect. In other
words, parents with sporty children are more likely to get involved in sport as a way
of encouraging their children. By both parents and children being involved, it will
ensure that children grow up to incorporate sport into their daily lives. This is
certainly a natural and lasting way to improve public health.
In conclusion, to deal with an increasing population of unfit, overweight people,
changing the lifestyle of the coming generation by introducing sport in schools is the
easiest and most effective method to use.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, so, well, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1507.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34397163121 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72751979225 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542553191489 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.8083931989 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.0 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6363636364 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 22.0 4.38176352705 502% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257735859164 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10111870204 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738199191005 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0716712238613 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685065324264 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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