The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is believed that obesity is the root of most illnesses resulting in mounting pressure on national health services. Although school syllables, as the only optimal solution, should include physical exercise classes in order to have mitigation over the issue, I agree to some extent that PE classes, along with draconian governmental measures on food industry, can make individuals fitter than they are today.
The traditional policy to raise public awareness on health-related problems is, of course, carried out by conducting lessons in schooling institutions. By doing so, youngsters will be able to deal with obesity since they know what is a detrimental effect of the unhealthy lifestyle, causing an ugly body shape on their health. Moreover, how to figure out the rate of not only obesity but also its consequences such as cardiovascular diseases and regular fatigue depends on a face-to-face explanation as time spent by parents to their children is being shrunk owing to the competitive world. For example, students at schools are highly motivated by physical trainers and teachers, urging them to be fit as a fiddle while their parents are commonly loaded with heavy work and cannot meet the needs of their sons and daughters. Thus, the conventional trigger for education to the public about health is indeed given in the school curriculum.
However, there is a leading role of authorities to play in coping with the excess weight of the population in which I think that this approach alleviates the burden on health-care service. To be more specific, people opt for eating unhealthy food instead of home-cooked meals, which is why even though they work out in gyms or regularly exercise in the morning and evening, extra fatty individuals are on the rise. If governments impose strict laws restricting the work or unhealthy food of dining centers like McDonald's or Hamburger, people will not be given an opportunity to eat out leading global healthy eating habits. Hence, typically will the tension on the medical sector be mitigated due to the measure taken by authorities.
In conclusion, as long as the conventional way of increasing public awareness about excess fat and its further outcomes is crucial for school-children which in turn is a long-term solution, harsh laws or rules taking health issues into account are also as important as PE classes. So, this includes almost all classes of population being able to get health service as well as it is better in terms of time spent on the process easing the stress on NHS when it comes to assisting ill people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, of course, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 41.998997996 164% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2159.0 1615.20841683 134% => OK
No of words: 425.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85024032253 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 176.041082164 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592941176471 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 506.74238477 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.7121299364 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.076923077 106.682146367 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.6923076923 20.7667163134 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0769230769 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181206876451 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589850955514 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391582591139 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0949212933939 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260985074678 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 50.2224549098 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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