A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as human, while others argue that human must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food research.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The exploitation of animals by mankind has been one of the heated topic in modern times. Many share an idea that people do not have the rights to take advantages of animals and they deserve to be treated fairly by human being. In contrast, detractors contend that it is necessary to utilize animals in certain context to fulfill human’s requirements. Both views will be outline following the essay in details, but in my own point, I side with the idea that animals should not be used as the source of food or assistance human beings in the proportionate way.
To begin with, it is acknowledged that mankind need the assistance of animals in various facets of life. Firstly, livestock such as cows, pigs, or horses make important contributions to cultivating and maximum profits for farmers by selling animal’s bodies in some part of the world. Some daily animals such as chickens and sheep are slaughtered on regular basis in order to ensure adequately supplying diverse sources of food for human which prevents some nations across the globe from the incident of starvation some nations across the globe. Secondly, it is more beneficial for human using medicines or medical treatments which have been tested on animals’ bodies such as mice or monkeys. By doing so, it can ensure the reliability of new drugs before being employed by mankind. Without the existence of animals, thousands of people are threatened with mortality.
On the other hand, I believe that it is no longer necessary to use animal for the sake of human due to a wide range of alternative feasible sources. They are also living creature so it is true that these animals have the same feeling as human beings and they have the right to exist instead of being severely killed to meet human’s demands. On top of that, excessive consumption of meat has detrimental impacts on people’ health and it is also a primary reason causing foodborne illnesses. Fortunately, there are wide range of alternative products available on the market which can provide the same amount of nutrients for customers. Take vegetarian diets as an example, vegetarian tend to opt for tofu and mushrooms as main ingredients which contain high levels of protein, a kind of nutrient presumably only found in meat. Furthermore, some plant-based medicine can be used to aid medical practitioner to effectively treat patients without utilizing medicines tested through animals.
In conclusion, although there is a wealth of benefits gained by human if taking advantages of animals to produce food, clothing or medicines. I claim that the employment of animals to fulfill loads of requirements of mankind is problematic for their own health in the long run.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, such as, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 41.998997996 179% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2259.0 1615.20841683 140% => OK
No of words: 449.0 315.596192385 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03118040089 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80308445359 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 176.041082164 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556792873051 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 719.1 506.74238477 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0794736811 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.5 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9444444444 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.55555555556 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376211771338 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107611388155 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.069817649819 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224043042705 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052967273872 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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