The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of the advertising but not the real need of the whole society in which they sell. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement
These days, it is claimed the development of advertisement can be presented by the increase in the sale of widespread commodity goods, rather than the demand of the community where they sell. While it can not be denied that advertising has significant impacts on the number of goods sales, I do not agree with this idea because of two main reasons.
On the one hand, nowadays advertising has become a multi-billion industry and consumer's expenditure are remarkably affected by this field. In fact, many commercials drive customer's desire to buy unnecessary products. In particular, attractive advertising campaigns and effects cause people to make impulsive purchases, which they might have not made if they had considered more carefully. Furthermore, when a product is promoted successfully and favoured by a large number of people, thanks to advertisements, other individuals could be also affected to follow the trend. In particular, children who are the most susceptible object would pester their parents to buy for them the trendy items which their peers have possessed.
On the other hand, I am convinced that people's demand is the most vital factor leading to the high sales of consumer goods in these societies. First, in today's market, there is a large percentage of experienced customers who are able to make a thorough decision when shopping. In the era of technology and information, it seems that customers are likely to spend money based on their buying habits, instead of the appealing content and effects of advertising. Another element that affects the amount of goods sales is individuals' budget. It is obvious that expenditure on goods depends on customers' monthly income, which means that without abundant financial stage, it is impossible for people to pay for their basic necessities and other personal requirements.
In conclusion, owing to the arguments above, I believe that despite the rapid growth of the advertising industry, people'choice is the most fundamental factor in high sales of commodity goods.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... considered more carefully. Furthermore, when a product is promoted successfully ...
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Suggestion: many; numerous
...s promoted successfully and favoured by a large number of people, thanks to advertisements, other...
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Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
... impossible for people to pay for their basic necessities and other personal requirements. In co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, so, while, in conclusion, in fact, in particular, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28086419753 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00447229261 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577160493827 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2307692308 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.615384615 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9230769231 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188648332354 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610486247283 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519521783176 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110946431843 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419758722994 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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